Yellow is my least favorite color.
That wasn’t always the case though! Years ago, I would watch
the sun shoot little yellow sparks of light onto the rocks by the shore. The
waves were too concerned with their work of gently polishing the rocks to
notice how they bounced the glow back out towards the deep. I traveled to
places where yellow and brown specks of sand stretched on endlessly toward the
horizon. If I wanted, I could chase the yellow of the sun around the globe,
but, the way the stars sparkled yellow on a hazy night were always just as
endearing.
Now, yellow just means prison.
The marks on the jar wall tell the story as well as I could.
At first, they were neat, delicate, and well-aligned. Each one signified a day.
After around a thousand days, the lines became deeper and longer – months. Soon, another thousand or so marks dotted the
room around me. The new ones were haphazard — years.
Each day was the same. The gentle sway of the ocean that I
once admired became my daily torment. While, as a captive of the yellow jar, I
was free from the assault of the water around me, I didn’t escape the overwhelming
pressure of the sea weighing down upon the small container. Before being placed
there, I would yearn at times for a moment of silent solitude. How wonderful
would it be just to sit and think without interruption or obligation? Such
luxury is difficult to appreciate in a state of desperation.
Regardless, I did occupy my mind.
I told myself story after story and imagined each one as
vividly as if it were right there in front of me. Sometimes, those stories
included how I ended up sealed in this jar, but I usually tried to think about
the future instead. My favorite story,
predictably, involved being released from the jar. I thought, “if anyone should
free me before a hundred years were passed, I would make him rich even after
his death.” I told myself this tale, and I held on to hope.
I counted and recounted the etchings on the wall. 100 years.
I was feeling more despondent than ever. Surely I haven’t been rescued because I just
haven’t promised enough! “I would give all the treasures in the world to my
deliverer!” I declared to the lid of the jar.
Another hundred lines joined the already crowded ranks.
I had tired of my own stories, quit believing in my
fabricated hope, and stopped carving the mocking lines into the wall. In my
anger, I swore that if anyone let me free, I would only give them the option of
how they wanted to die.
As it turns out, hundreds of years of solitude is no help to
combatting cunning! After brief glimpses of freedom that was anything but
yellow, I was back in the jar. This time; however, I sent myself there.
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Author's Note:
When reading the unit on Arabian Nights, I was particularly intrigued by the story of The Fisherman. The namesake character is severely impoverished and needs to get a good catch in order to provide for his family. However, after three tries, he has caught nothing. Then, on his final cast of the day, the fisherman pulls up a yellow jar in his net. He assumes that it must be valuable, so he decides to take it back to sell. Suddenly though, thick smoke pours out of the jar and a genie emerges! The genie proceeds to tell the fisherman about what he resolved to do for whomever freed him over the course of his hundreds of years in the jar. The fisherman is quick witted, though, and in avoiding his own death, asks for the genie to verify that he really can fit in the tiny jar. Once the genie returns to the jar to prove a point, the fisherman quickly replaces the lid, trapping the genie once more. Throughout all of 1001 Arabian Nights, I wished that there was more insight into the genies' personalities and backstories. So, I was excited to take the time to explore what the fisherman's genie could have been thinking during his many years of imprisonment.
Bibliography:
The Arabian Nights' Entertainments by Andrew Lang and illustrated by H. J. Ford (1898).
I think you should consider moving the authors note to the beginning of your story. This would give me a little background about what I am reading. It was definitely a cute story, but I think it's a nicer read after I find out the Genie is imprisoned in a yellow jar. Telling the story from the genie's point of view is clever, I like how you tell about his thoughts from within the jar.
ReplyDeleteReally good story! I also read part of the Arabian Nights and a lot of it was really interesting, especially The Fisherman like you mentioned in your authors note. I thought your use of imagery was really good and gave the reader a good image of your story. Like someone mentioned above, I like the idea of moving the author's note to the top... I am also guilty of putting it at the bottom but for my next story I will probably move it to the top. That way, the reader knows what they are reading right off the bat. Overall, good story! Keep reading other peoples blogs and stories to adapt new ways of writing, as I have found that's a great way to learn in this class.
ReplyDeleteAudra, Good story! I found myself really trying to see if the genie in the jar would ever be set free. To spend that amount of time locked up in a jar has to be tormenting. Throughout the story I found myself asking questions, which is a good thing because that means the story has captured my attention. I think a good sequel to this story would be the genie actually being released and then having to grant wishes for the person that released the genie. The story wouldn't necessarily have to have to follow the standard "three wish genie" role. Great story!
ReplyDeleteHey Audra! I really enjoyed reading your story. The way you wrote your storytelling made me almost feel like I was trapped inside the jar! I can’t even imagine what I would do if I was the genie stuck inside… I thought it was a nice addition how you talked about the marks on the jar that he made to count how long he had been in there. They seem to have a deeper meaning behind them as well. Keep up the good work!
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